Tuesday, 12 January 2010


A Sunday Scribble prompt - written on a Monday and probably posted on a Tuesday as I've only just published - don't want to look too keen do I?

The heat was intense wrapping itself tightly around her, choking the air from her lungs. Around her other figures shifted slightly in the thick mist which helped them not look at each other.

It was an uncomfortable place in every sense of the word. Claustrophobia grabbed at her throat and she wanted out. Her head felt so heavy she could barely move but limbs finally obeyed and at last the rush of cooler air hit her as she opened the door.

But this wasn't the extreme she was after. She turned and smiled at the stranger who happened to be standing watching and, holding her nose, plunged into the icy depths.

Rising to the surface in a maelstrom of exhilaration and shock she laughed and shook the water from her hair.

"You're brave", said the stranger as she gingerly dipped a testing toe in the freezing water. "The steam room's always enough torture for me..."


  1. Wow, is the heat on....?
    This is excellent!

  2. What an interesting piece! I'm smiling. ;)

  3. wow, I'm with the stranger! I love how this seemed so intense and building as if it were going somewhere else entirely!

  4. I liked that--it kept my attention :)

  5. As I started reading, I thought the scene was set in some other-worldly place! Something sinister; then surprise! Very nice:) Thanks for stopping by my blog!

  6. What a great surprise ending. Thanks for a good short read.

  7. bravooooooooooooo!!!

    I am sorry for the late arrival to Sunday Scribblings but I had to pay you a visit :)

    Happy SS

    Extreme 'Caution'

  8. Phew, from one extreme...


  9. I'm with the stranger, not brave enough to go for that cold first shock when getting into the water.


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